Please someone go over my resume?

Question

I have an interview tomorrow for a bank teller position. So I have spent the past two days fabricating my resume for this position. Any advice would be appreciated. Thank you and I hope you like it!

Ben Balasian

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Objective

To use my excellent communication, analytical, and personal skills in a customer service focused position in the finance industry while gaining knowledge that will allow me to further my career.

Qualifications

Four years of General Manager experience. Ability to multitask, prioritize and work enthusiastically under deadlines and pressure. Well developed planning and organizational skills. Utilizing and providing customers with excellent service. Well versed in the standard Office Suite of software programs. Fully focus attention toward client to ensure satisfaction and future referrals.
Professional Experience

GNG Vinyl Fencing • Los Angeles, CA • 2/2006 - 7/2008

• Meeting monthly quota and working to receive business through referrals.
• Travel to client estates surrounding the Los Angeles County.
• Negotiating cost of labor, and supplies.
• Finalizing designs to present to our fabrication team.
• Monitoring, and maintaining customer satisfaction.

Hot Wings Café • Glendale/Pasadena, CA • 05/2001 - 12/2005

• Monitoring cash revenue to track financial progress.
• Overseeing restaurant staff, seat customers, book restaurant parties, and keep employees up to par.
• Responsible for customer satisfaction and food quality.
• Responsible for complying with health inspection regulation of Glendale/Pasadena Health Department.

Education

• LA Valley College, AA degree
• Burbank High School, High School Diploma

Skills

• Capable to handle pressure in fast paced demanding environment.
• Able to interact with all levels of personnel.
• Extremely detail oriented.



I've removed my phone number and address. It also looks better on word.

Answer 1

It looks good, but here are some quick thoughts -



Fully focus attention toward client to ensure satisfaction and future referrals. Hmm, maybe Skillful at fully focusing attention toward clients......



Utilizing and providing customers with excellent service.

Utilizing what? Utilizing basically means using. I think you want another word there, or you're missing words after utilizing.



When using bullet points it is best to be consistent, meaning all complete sentences with periods, or all phrases with no periods. You have phrases with periods, such as: Meeting monthly quota and working to receive business through referrals. This is not a complete sentence and should not have a period. Your bullet points are phrases, so take out the periods. (If you wrote it: I met monthly quotas and worked to acquire business through referrals. then it would need a period, but you don't want to put in "I".)



For past jobs use past tense. Check all your bullet points and change the ones that need changing. Past tense like: Met monthly quota and worked to receive business through referrals.

Also, receive isn't a great word there, how about something like acquire?



Travel to client estates surrounding the Los Angeles County.

It sounds like the estates surrounded LA Co, throughout Los Angeles County works better.



Negotiating cost of labor and supplies. No comma (and change to past tense, as on all the others that need it. Negotiated cost of labor and supplies.)



Monitoring and maintaining customer satisfaction. No comma - change to past tense.



Responsible for complying with health inspection regulation of Glendale/Pasadena Health Department.

Should that be regulations? Or something like Responsible for compliance with the regulations of the Glendale/Pasadena Health Department.



Capable of handling pressure in a fast-paced, demanding environment. (of instead of to, fast-paced with a hyphen.)



Check out: http://career-advice.monster.com/resume-tips/home.aspx There are links to sample resumes. Look at the resumes for your past professions and see the wording they use.



Hope this helps. Good luck!

Answer 2

One web site continuously! you need to get your resume right down to a minimum of one web site, yet that does no longer recommend it quite is primary. attempt to be direct and to the area of the activity itemizing and the corporate. A resume basically gets skimmed so it must be to the element and dynamic so it sticks out and exhibits you have the coaching and adventure for the region. be sure it quite is obviously written and has NO typos. Have it regarded at by skill of as a lot of human beings as plausible who've adventure with resumes and take all suggestion to strategies in spite of in case you will possibly no longer agree. Take resume instructions at your college additionally. people who evaluation resumes for jobs are very choosy.

Answer 3

Wow this looks excellent!



Just be relax during the interview. Be yourself.



I wish you the best of luck.